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Post by shawnstarr on Mar 20, 2012 20:35:16 GMT -6
Would really love some feedback on my first RP here. I know nothing about Strikeout and noticed he's yet to register for the boards, so I just took the bull by the horns if you will, made some things up and had fun.
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Post by cajunflames on Mar 21, 2012 6:57:27 GMT -6
Damn. You're definitely one of the main contenders here. I hope you enjoyed my RP, if you read it. Id HATE to face you in the tournament.
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Post by justin on Mar 21, 2012 10:50:09 GMT -6
I thought it was a decent roleplay, but in all honesty I thought it was too long. Its over 4,300 words which to me (again only my opinion) is a little too long. A couple of your scenes are big huge blocks of text which you could probably break up some. Also, it seemed like your scenes were bouncing around everywhere as almost if it was filler. For example the first scene where he does pushups and what not could have been left out. The main part of your roleplay took place at the photo shoot and should have taken place there from the beginning.
For not knowing anything about your opponent I thought you did some good trash talk and also got your guy over well with the self-centered theme.
My grade would be: 6.5/10
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Post by Phantom on Mar 21, 2012 20:29:24 GMT -6
I didn't have a chance to go through it thoroughly but in any case good show. Like I believe the post above me said, way too long in my opinion. I usually try and keep my normal rps under 1000 words. On ppvs I try for 2000 words. That is my own personal guidelines. But good start.
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