A Critique Needed

Phantom USPW Low-Mid Card Talent Posts: 89	A Critique Needed Mar 15, 2012 19:47:47 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Phantom on Mar 15, 2012 19:47:47 GMT -6 Hey I am writing something on my own and I am just about done. Would anyone be willing to take a look at it and give me some advice and review? It is just a couple of pages long but I am not sure how it turned out.

"Classy" Mike C USPW Low-Mid Card Talent Posts: 69	A Critique Needed Mar 16, 2012 2:38:36 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by "Classy" Mike C on Mar 16, 2012 2:38:36 GMT -6 I'd be happy to take a look